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The capitals are good. And the paragraphs are good too.
the comma's sometimes look weird as they are in their position.
you did good on this one. keep it up.
It will be certain to give people goosebumps, just like me. You know how to get people to think about this.
And it really has a meaning. the topic is very original.
don't worry. The discription doesn't have to be filled with words that people care more about than the poem itself. Maybe put a paragraph of the poem in it? That wants to make people read it. good job. really.
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:icondarknymfa:
DarkNymfa Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yay, thanks for the critique. X3

Let's see... The comma's in this one annoyed me quite a bit, as I didn't want to make the sentences too long, so I'm not too happy with them on some points either.

And I usually consider the description to be something were you write about the art you uploaded, like what you're trying to say with it, or what inspired you.
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:iconpouringblood:
PouringBlood Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No problem.

You got a point on the discription, but if you have nothing to write there, you can just use a paragraph and such. As I've seen some artwork on deviantart, and then look at the discription, I only see a dash or a dot. Oh well, everybody has their own way of describing.
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:icondarknymfa:
DarkNymfa Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Yeah, I guess. It's just that I want the poem to speak for itself, you know.
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:iconpouringblood:
PouringBlood Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Ah, ok.

-so much text c':-
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:icondarknymfa:
DarkNymfa Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Lol, sometimes replies are like that. XD
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:iconpouringblood:
PouringBlood Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Indeed cx
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:icondarknymfa:
DarkNymfa Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
XD
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